I actually quite liked it. It has a potential for improvement (voice acting, drawings, animation, so on), but I quite liked it. When Odahviing landed, you could for example have added a little bounce to his landing (you know, how you slightly bend your knees when landing after a jump).
The voices sounded like they were recorded on a laptop microphone. Which they probably were. Also, the female voice seemed to have been chipmunked (i.e: the pitch was set high), and that will be very annoying, unless you manage to work it into your animation cleverly.
Also, I need something to base my critique on, so; How old are you and how long have you been working with flash? Because you show much promise, at the very least in writing stuff like this. You just have to improve your flash skills.
But anyway, this was fun to watch. I'll look forward to see what you will be making.... in the FUTURE.